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Adverbial phrase	I walked quickly to the shop.  I slowly jogged back home  I carefully nailed the piece of wood.
Dialogue	“What are you doing?” said the witch.  “I'm eating your house” replied hansel. “I have a whole bowl of candy, would you like to come inside?”  “Okay” said Hansel and Gretal.
Complex sentences	I drank water out of a cup.  I mowed the lawns, with a lawn mower.  I was sleeping, in my bed.

Hansel and Gretal  Complex sentences	There was a woodcutter, he cut down trees.
Hansel and Gretal  Dialogue	“They are for us,” his mother was saying.  “Four mouths to feed”.  “We can not”.  “Lose them not kill them”.
Adverbial phrase	I slowly walked through the woods.

The forest was as dark and gloomyWalking through it was like me in my deepest nightmare. 

The leaves were dark charcoal, The branches were as sharp as knives. The strawberry scent lingered across the forest; it flew under Hansel and Gretel's nose. The tree stumps were harder than bones. Day 2  Suddenly the distance was a clearing, there was a house. The house was sugar filled to the brim, the door was encrusted with lollies and sweets The chimney had marshmallow smoke flowing out of it. The gingerbread looked chewy, delightful and most of all it looked sweet. But they knew that if they licked their drooling tongue on the sweet candy there might be  consequences but the sour scent loured their heartwarmed souls. But Gretal said that “i'm going to go eat that yum, sour sweet crunchy lollies” Hansel said that “no it is wrong we should go home im getting scared” But in her mind she really wanted to eat those sweets. 

We looked at the door made out of luscious candy we walked up to the door about to eat the door handle and wish the door slammed open there was such an ugly witch: she had a, pointy nose, red bloodshot eyes, green curly hair, fat bald ears, a sharp chin and a massive mole on her forehead, she took me inside and Hansel became fatter and fatter, wider and wider when each minute, second and hour past he became bigger and bigger.  He couldn’t stop eating the crunchy candy, divine donuts and melting marshmallows. But little did she know that she was being fooled, she came to push me in the fire, but I knew kung fu and I flipped her on her back. She was parralized and we ran away. 

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